Tuesday, August 9, 2011

Ever look for something and you really don't know what it is?

I like the concrete language at the beginning of this one, the third stanza seems to me incomplete, although the opening line is strong ... but the grieving is not explored enough, it isn't nessecary to state what you are grieving, but give it a little more punch ... describe how you are grieving or how the simile of grief is like the taste of dust.

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